What do you think of this poem i wrote tonight. (sorry i had to shorten the words down) i cant fit it all in?
Written by admin on November 27th, 2009
sit in 1 spot, drink on what spot, on a glass,
watch birds fly, if only that was u,
watch where u step, watch what u say, watch how much you pay,
you feel like u could fly away.
wait for tomorrow,u cant wait to get home, cant wait to see your loved 1.
u like to reveive a letter, u cant wait to get better.
when u try to avoid but u cant refuse,
when u try to win but then you lose, when u try to get rid of your blues, and hope for some good news,
was this meant to be.
u try to be something that your not, have u ever said something to someone, and then forgot, and never knew how the person felt, do you believe in fait,
when you do something that you truly regret, when you say something, that u should never have said, and now you relise how that person felt,
everyone makes mistakes, and everyones heart gets broken, and these words that you have spoken,has a dozon meanings,
u will be better in the end just come & take a walk with me my friend, i’ll show you your way.
November 30th, 2009 at 6:54 am
Are you a Vogon?
December 3rd, 2009 at 5:32 pm
I think you should find another way of expressing yourself.
December 5th, 2009 at 9:58 am
This peom is well written you do haw a few cool little rythms but you do have a couple of mispellings here and there like fait is spelled fate. But I do like your poem.
December 5th, 2009 at 6:54 pm
Whats a vogon mean?
Your poem is okay, i give it 4/10
December 7th, 2009 at 3:58 pm
cliche + another cliche + and another one
too open, too bad, shouldn;t be called a poem
December 8th, 2009 at 5:17 pm
I liked it….makes me wonder about you….makes me wonder about myself, do we all feel this way? Are we all so alike?
December 9th, 2009 at 5:33 pm
romaticism, i like it but you should probably write better nothing is worst than a badly written, oorly spelled oeam and whats with all the “u”s.